Great read, the story so uncanny my nephew took his own life 2 days before Christmas of last year on a central line station,he was the son I never had,his contemt for syc doctors and staff and meds,RIP JIMMY BARKER skinska
Hello mate, sorry to hear that. I share his contempt, which was the point of the story really - some of the bullshit myself, and others I know, have been fed over the years in the name of 'medicine' or 'recovery' has been shocking. Sorry for your loss - too many people who needn't have gone - especially when they reached out for help - is frankly scandalous. Thanks for reading and leaving a comment.
Hello Emma - thanks for reading and leaving a comment. You've read some of my other stories and I like working with unpleasant characters, but I wanted this bloke to be likeable and unpleasant, otherwise no one would have cared about him. Thanks again.
Thanks for reading Gayle, but especially thanks for leaving a comment. This one's well short on comments, but roughly the same views as the rest. I'm not sure why. Can't win them all.
Nice one Andy - thanks for reading. Slow on comments this one, so your lonely one is much appreciated. 'In one form or another' - agreed. Dipping out, or at least the option to, might keep us going. Thanks for leaving a comment.
Such a fantastic piece of mind fuckery I had to read it twice ! When a story ends with the author's first person account of their own demise it suggests, to me at least, that something deeper has been conveyed. Very enjoyable.
Hello Nick - I was just going through my 'recent activity' as Substack calls it and saw I hadn't replied to this one. And yes, it was a bit of a decision to kill the author and make the story sort of unreal, but as you said, it suggests something 'else' although perhaps 'deeper' was/is going on. Thanks for reading.
Hello Nick - that's interesting - because you're right, but that's for another time. I thought a lot about publishing this one, as it is quite a departure from my 'usual' spiel, so it's good to hear your thoughts. Glad you enjoyed it, if that's the right word.
Precisely. Without fear we have no courage, bravery, we have no strength. And without those things, humanity would have died off thousands of years ago. Thanks for reading and leaving a comment, bradley, it's much appreciated.
Oh, you're back, the reader who deleted their three previous comments on this very same story in August, see 'deleted' below. When I write it is for the love of the word, the color, like tossing paint on a canvas, and using a lot of ear and having read a bit here and there, I generally come out ok, but technically I don’t know what’s happening, nor do I care.
Wow, this piece has really affected you, which could have been interesting. Approached like adults we both might have learned something. But your frankly bizarre hostility seems like an opportunity missed.
Very nice balance between moving the story along and inner monologue. I like the touch with the olfactory included.
Nice one, Paxmax, thanks for reading.
Great read, the story so uncanny my nephew took his own life 2 days before Christmas of last year on a central line station,he was the son I never had,his contemt for syc doctors and staff and meds,RIP JIMMY BARKER skinska
Hello mate, sorry to hear that. I share his contempt, which was the point of the story really - some of the bullshit myself, and others I know, have been fed over the years in the name of 'medicine' or 'recovery' has been shocking. Sorry for your loss - too many people who needn't have gone - especially when they reached out for help - is frankly scandalous. Thanks for reading and leaving a comment.
This story had me captuvated from beginning to end.
Hello Emma - thanks for reading and leaving a comment. You've read some of my other stories and I like working with unpleasant characters, but I wanted this bloke to be likeable and unpleasant, otherwise no one would have cared about him. Thanks again.
Harrowing tale -superbly told and one we can all relate to. Great story Chris !!!!
Thanks for reading Gayle, but especially thanks for leaving a comment. This one's well short on comments, but roughly the same views as the rest. I'm not sure why. Can't win them all.
Dark but tbh we’ve all been there in one form or another. Andy Mac.
Nice one Andy - thanks for reading. Slow on comments this one, so your lonely one is much appreciated. 'In one form or another' - agreed. Dipping out, or at least the option to, might keep us going. Thanks for leaving a comment.
Such a fantastic piece of mind fuckery I had to read it twice ! When a story ends with the author's first person account of their own demise it suggests, to me at least, that something deeper has been conveyed. Very enjoyable.
Hello Nick - I was just going through my 'recent activity' as Substack calls it and saw I hadn't replied to this one. And yes, it was a bit of a decision to kill the author and make the story sort of unreal, but as you said, it suggests something 'else' although perhaps 'deeper' was/is going on. Thanks for reading.
More darkness peppered with smiles & sniggers. Probably the best opening paragraph you'll come across on the whole of Substack.
I had to go back and read it, but yes - if I'm allowed to agree - I do. Nice one, Al.
Hello Nick - that's interesting - because you're right, but that's for another time. I thought a lot about publishing this one, as it is quite a departure from my 'usual' spiel, so it's good to hear your thoughts. Glad you enjoyed it, if that's the right word.
Life is meant to be scary.
"Scared is an anagram of sacred."
Precisely. Without fear we have no courage, bravery, we have no strength. And without those things, humanity would have died off thousands of years ago. Thanks for reading and leaving a comment, bradley, it's much appreciated.
Oh, you're back, the reader who deleted their three previous comments on this very same story in August, see 'deleted' below. When I write it is for the love of the word, the color, like tossing paint on a canvas, and using a lot of ear and having read a bit here and there, I generally come out ok, but technically I don’t know what’s happening, nor do I care.
Hello Aidan - hello to you too - thanks for reading, and all comments are great. Nice one.
Thanks for reading.
Wow, this piece has really affected you, which could have been interesting. Approached like adults we both might have learned something. But your frankly bizarre hostility seems like an opportunity missed.