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Just my two cents. Nice one Chris. Another great exercise in an evolving writing style where the consciousness stream is thrown unapologetically at the reader as the author relays their interpretation of the scene precisely as they alone experience it, no explanation just the protagonist reacting to his environment within his own head,, forcing the reader to decipher it and try to make sense of both the scenario and the authors warped viewpoint of the situation. It has an unnerving quality and we are left with a sense of the authors helplessness and isolation as he finds himself powerless and slightly paranoid in a chaotic scenario populated by grotesque indifferent characters with whom he has nothing in common and though he must, he feels unable to communicate with.

The closing paragraph is both kind of depressing and disarmingly honest and I feel that it is coming from the author himself rather than the protagonist (who may be the author in earlier stage of life.)

This part jumped off the page, pointing to a poignant component of the authors sense of isolation, of disappointment and a disconnect with a past and family life that has been broken...

"My dreams. My losses. My failures. This child of a father whose land is no more. This other. This man who writes"

That's pure gold right there.

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Liz Young's avatar

Wife of the Midnight teeth 😁 so did you get a whack round the head or what? Feel like I just have,long time can't see lol, see ya later Master Bater x

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